Friday, March 6, 2009

Love Lost .....


He saw her gazing at the blue dress displayed on the mannequin. Even after 2 long years, he had recognized her at one glance. She had grown thin, but definitely looked more beautiful then ever. She still held that attractive look which made people to just stare at her. And that was what he was doing at the moment. Admiring her from a very safe distance. Something seemed to have disturbed her, and she suddenly turned his way. She looked all surprised now to see him there.

He walked towards her, fearing the possibility of her ignoring him and walking away. But then she smiled at him and his tension seemed to fade away. They stood there facing each other silently. There were so many things he wanted to tell her, so many questions he wanted to ask. No words came out of him.

He: Hi, such a long time.

She: Yes, its really a surprise to see you. You look the same.

He: Yeah. So hows life? Hey how about a cup of coffee? Are you busy?

She: No, cup of coffee will be great.

They now sat at the coffee shop talking about everything other then anything related to their personal life. He was actually scared to ask her about her present. He was not sure to how me may react, if she said that now she had someone in her life. They had a distance of 2 years between them. There seemed to be a lot many changes in her now. She had changed the way she wore her hair. But her smile was the same. He still knew how to make her laugh. For anyone else looking at them now, they may have seemed like a perfect couple enjoying a cup of coffee. But only they knew about the underlying tension in between them.

An hour had passed by quickly and she realized that she had to leave now.

She: Its already late. I have to leave. Thanks for the coffee.

He: Oh am i paying for it? I thought you were, so i ordered the most expensive one!

She laughed, stood up and ruffled his head. And he just wanted to freeze that moment.

He walked her to the lift and the tension was back now. He was not sure whether he should ask for her number and she seemed quite jittery too.
The lift opened and she walked inside. He just stood out and smiled at her.

She: i dont know if i will see you again anytime.

He nodded silently. The life door started to close.

She: You know ... I still ...

The door had closed completely by now.

He stood there staring at the closed door.
Then very silently he murmured "yeah i love you too!"


22 comments:

perturbed perceiver said...

aww..that was short n sweet ..nd may i say very touching!

Chantel said...

...I felt my heart slowly break at the end... Well done.

ApocalypsE said...

tat was B.E.A.utiful...:-)

Akansha Agrawal said...

Lovely work...

Common place incident probably, but beautifully written!!!

Arv said...

ahh... feel sorry for that dude... beautifully written da...

take care and have a lovely weekend... cheers...

Lucifer said...

i dont have words to express wat m goin thru after readin this...i jus went awwwww...then awwwwwwwwww....
n finally ended wid awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!

Suresh Kumar said...

nicely written.

One of the moments to be treasured....

hitch writer said...

tell him to open the door and call her and order another coffee... tell her !!!

thats a sad end !

Anya said...

why dint he look through the keyhole?

nice one.. touched..

www.chronicwriter.com

Charmed One! said...

@perturbed perceiver
thank u :)


@Chantel
thank u :) ..glad you liked it...

Saim said...

damn d moments of uncertainty:(

Nemesis said...

Wow... That was level 3 for sure.... Impressed.. and touched...

Nikhil Menon said...

Killer!! oh my goodness,tht was awesome..!! and as I read it again,it trifles much much much more..I am jealous suddenly.. :p


Jus kiddin..cool blog.. :)

Cheers..

Nikhil

pisku said...

touching piece :)

And liked the style too. I use it quite often!

Charmed One! said...

@ApocalypsE
Thank you mister :)..


@Akansha Agrawal
yeah i know it can be quite common :)..thank you girl!

Charmed One! said...

@Arv
thank you Arv...


@mayz
Yeah just the awwwwwwwww will do mayank :) ..


@Suresh
Thank Suresh :) .. take care..

Charmed One! said...

@hitch writer
wish i could do that if i knew him :) ...

@Chronicwriter
thank you mister :)


@comfortably numb
they can really be very confusing !

Charmed One! said...

@Nemesis
cool level 3 huh :)
thank you :)...


@MultiMenon
hey thanks for stopping by at my blog :) ...
jealous huh :) .. lols...
hope to keep seeing you at my blog :)...


@pisku
thank you :) .. yeah but your stories are always beautiful :) ...

Lena said...

i've read this in the reader first, now read again and i loved it even more.
Too often words unsaid change our life for good and we are left with nothing but regrets and memories that fade.

Deepika said...

beautifully written!
:)

Unknown said...

beautifully written... I could hear the shattering noise of heartbreaks :(
I hope I never experience anything close in my life... ever!!!

Zabi said...

Nice 1 buddy. sounds real is it?